Water Safety

Hi P3 Charity,

Do you remeber a composition you wrote on water safety?

Here's one composition written by a pupil in the level.



"Alright boys, you have practised well today. Let's call it a day and we shall meet again tomorrow. As the competition is coming soon, go home and rest well." said the soccer coach before he dismissed the boys. John took his soccer ball and left the field.

On his way home, John dribbled his ball merrily along a canal. Suddenly, he tripped over a stone and fell. The ball rolled into the canal. As it was his favourite soccer ball, John desperately tried to get the ball back. He leaned over the railings and tried to retrieve the ball. At that moment, he accidentally fell into the canal.

John cried out in fright. He really hoped that a passer-by would come to his rescue. Fortunately at that moment, someone walked past the canal and heard John's cries for help. Without any second thoughts, the passer-by quickly jumped into the canal to save John. He swiftly swam towards John and saved him.

It was indeed a wonder that John was rescued in such a deep canal. However, John could not retrieve his soccer ball. Nonetheless, it was a good lesson learnt for John that day. He vowed never to commit the same mistake again.

I have 3 questions for you to think about.

(1) pick out 2 good words / phrases
(2) pick out a good idea / portion from the above composition that you think can improve the composition you wrote
(3)change the ending of this composition (last paragraph)